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Old 11-04-2009, 09:14 PM
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I got some advice from someone I cant remember who... But thanks anyways to him.

Now and in the future I will post my levels in this thread (You can do it to if you want).
And please rate, and if it's bad then please tell me what's bad so I can improve it in the future.

Here's a level that I made that was mean't to be for Chrisz's Mansion, a office. Tried to make it like the same levels downstairs.
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Old 11-04-2009, 10:03 PM
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For an office, its bad. For Chrisz mansion office, its fine. Seeing as it'd hardly be used.
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Old 11-04-2009, 10:08 PM
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Mhmm, thanks for the reply.

But could you maybe tell me why you think it's bad? So I maybe can fix it.
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Old 11-04-2009, 11:35 PM
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I don't like the floor tiles. The pinkish carpet going through the level is out of place, and the darkened wood surrounding it just looks funny.

I'm not sure why an office would have explosive gas barrels or ammunition lying around.

The general shape of the level feels a bit too symmetric.

Besides those flaws, it's a decent level.
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Old 11-05-2009, 12:11 AM
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Mhmmm, I will see what I can do then.

Edit: Here it is.
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Old 11-05-2009, 01:15 AM
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lol remove the cans and the crate, also make the tables at the top pop out where the columns are, it makes it look more realistic and nicer.
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Old 11-05-2009, 01:21 AM
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remove the crate

Also, I love the back of the room. looks awesome ;]
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Old 11-05-2009, 08:44 PM
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Okay, I just got bored with the office, so I made it to a police office instead.

Here is it.
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Old 11-05-2009, 09:41 PM
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Doesn't look bad.. Tough that red carpet is ugly there if you ask me..
+ one detail, have you ever seen empty boards on a table on a police office

I wanna work there, They have nice drinks.. (Middle table)
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Old 11-05-2009, 09:51 PM
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Doesn't look bad.. Tough that red carpet is ugly there if you ask me..
+ one detail, have you ever seen empty boards on a table on a police office

I wanna work there, They have nice drinks.. (Middle table)
To be honest, theres too much **** everywhere, get rid of some of the stuff, it looks like a clutter room.

As a person who has LAT'ed for Noctorious and is supposed to go over the top and put **** everywhere, id say this is waaaaay to much.

Plus 1 table has a bit of a curve into the wall and one has a curve going into the walkway, make it a little less copy/pasted.
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Old 11-05-2009, 09:52 PM
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and as for your mr name, you need to give back my crizen, its my only gun :/
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Old 11-05-2009, 10:50 PM
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I know it's very chaos lol, im thinking about making a whole new level instead.
A more huge office.

And thanks for rating.

Edit: Okay, here is it.
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Old 11-07-2009, 02:15 PM
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that office look good.
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Old 11-07-2009, 04:22 PM
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Thanks.

But could you maybe rate it better?
It aint that important, but if you have time, explain why you like it.
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Old 11-07-2009, 05:31 PM
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well i like it cause its sure look like a dam police office, but the last desk could use more space or make it like this _| |_
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