08-01-2009, 01:34 AM
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Join Date: Jan 2007
Location: Philadelphia
Posts: 3,038
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Zone Roll
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Thought this forum needed a new post.
Like the title says, this is a roll. I'd like some feedback only about this, maybe some ideas to improve it. |
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Oh squiggly line in my eye fluid. I see you lurking there on the peripheral of my vision.
But when I try to look at you, you scurry away.
Are you shy, squiggly line?
Why only when I ignore you, do you return to the center of my eye?
Oh, squiggly line, it's alright, you are forgiven.
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Last edited by Switch; 08-01-2009 at 01:55 AM..
Reason: fixed something I found
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