I hope you don't take offense, but after listening a couple of times now I kind of feel as though it's coming and going in a lot of different directions; but they're not related or connected together, that's the difference between a lot of different sounds and a composition of sorts. I kind of really liked the trance/electronic sounding parts by themselves (especially around 1.58-2.48+) but with the piano it just didn't match in the arrangement you've got; you used it at the start as a kind of introduction build up, and that was it. Some of the things you've used are extremely overused and sound like default examples
I couldn't do any better though, just giving my opinion on it. I think it's okay and I kind of feel with a bit more practice you could produce some nice work, so I hope you don't give a **** about what I just said lol.