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Loriel
02-05-2003, 09:33 PM
Spanning the next couple of days, we will have a Graalian poetry event. All you have to do is to create a poem and post it here in this thread. The poem must be completely in-character, not involving anything OOC or outside-of-graal things - you see, it must be perfectly Graal related! Also, you are not allowed to bash other players, kingdoms or something like that in your poem.
You will only be allowed to post one poem, but you are free to edit it as long as the forums allow you to do so.

In this thread, other players are supposed to give their comments on your poem. Please only post comments that are usable to declare a winner and also explain your opinion, so do not bash other people's work!
Have fun, the contest will run until sometime this weekend, depending on when I find the time to choose winners.
The first place person will get to choose from three predefined skill scrolls, the second place from the remaining two, and the third place will get whatever is left.

Dude6252000
02-05-2003, 09:37 PM
When you mean IC, do you mean RPing character, or just only Graal Kingdoms stuff?

Kinatt
02-05-2003, 10:23 PM
My poem!!!!!!!!!

I call it..
I missed the boat..

I went to bake late but I didn't think late would affect me
Ferry came around then fate wouldn't let be
Wait up - WAIT UP - so I can get out guy!
I guess my pet was mad 'cause I gave it no pie
And when it finally did arrive I was a Silver too late
Ran back to my house and I knew I had to skate
Stepped out put on my wallet and my Speed ring to run
And said to myself if I miss the ferry I'm done!
But I ran down hill as I saw it Float and float
I ran down the hill trying to catch the Boat!
Now I'm tellin myself it's ice bomy cool.
Standin on the dock like a pathetic fool
But the boat has gone to finish its route
So I am stuck here to sit with my pet and pout.
Can somebody come real fast to my rescue?
I'm stuck at the Docks and my foods gettin low too!

--Chris--
02-05-2003, 11:38 PM
My poem....
I call it: "Words of a newbie."

LEL PWNED
I R ROX0RZ J00 SUX0RZ
OMFG LIEK [email protected] I R HAS ROXED J00 SOX
P#34R /\/\Y 1337 /\/4K3D 5K1LLZ
k

Dude6252000
02-06-2003, 12:00 AM
Originally posted by --Chris--
My poem....
I call it: "Words of a newbie."

LEL PWNED
I R ROX0RZ J00 SUX0RZ
OMFG LIEK [email protected] I R HAS ROXED J00 SOX
P#34R /\/\Y 1337 /\/4K3D 5K1LLZ
k
*jaw drops* PERFECT! You're going to win for sure.

JrTerrorist
02-06-2003, 11:09 AM
It wasnt IC :|
So I removed it k?

JrTerrorist
02-06-2003, 06:14 PM
HERE!

ShipWrecked
Sailing along on a midsummers day,
no deckhands at all.. I've manned the sail,
heading for a calm location,
to go to my special haven,
the ship hit some rocks.. I wasnt careful enough,
crashed onto land.. it apears im stuck!

A very small island is where I am trapped,
two trees and some grass.. im going to snap!
Fighting off shell bomies day after day,
still waiting for someome to save the day,
Im almost out of food, the water's too salty,
the shade of these trees is all that seems healthy.

Someone please rescue me before I die,
I really miss Chicken Pie

:whatever:

Zurkiba
02-06-2003, 06:20 PM
There are many creatures in Graal
Some have arms and some have tails.
Most run around and attack
yet some come to be pet.
In the dugeons you should watch your back
Unless you love to bet.
-----

The best warrior would be Zurk
and no, he's not a Turk.
He loves to run
and he loves to sing
which explains his buns,
but poetry isn't his thing.

He owns the shop
which sells a top
which pays off the cop.
Because inside he hides
He does it to bide
because the war is here
and the war is there.

Sailing isn't fun for him
Nor is it for Tim.
Tim and Him fight together
Against the monsters they do.
The ghosts they find say boo
Yet they fear not them.

When they return home for the night
they get hungry and grab a bite.
They depart to their house and to their wife
and then they go to sleep.
When they awake they grab their knife
and go to the dugeons to fight the heviels.
They long for the day to fight the deviel,
to renouce their long lost love.
And that love is the food they eat
Which contains steak and grubs.
After lunch they rest, but soon they leave to beat,
Beat the monsters that is.
-----
I cant think of any more words that ryhm =x
----
One bright day in the middle of the night,
two dead boys got up to fight.
They stood back to back and faced each other,
drew their swords and shot each other.
A deaf policeman heard the noise, and came to kill the two dead boys.
If you dont believe this lie is true, ask the blind man he saw it too!

It's not mine, I dunno who wrote it.

Christian
02-06-2003, 09:24 PM
I Post in German,
Loriel can read it.

Es ist in einer "komischen" Sprache
da ich alt deutsche Dialekte verwende.
Aber die Bedeutung wird dir sicher klar werden.

Das ist der 1. und 2. teil ich schreibe gerade am 3. und 4.
Wird nen bischen lang vieleicht aber das ist nunmal kg :D
achja es ist ja ein Poem kein Gedicht
aber ich habe eine Mischung aus Gedicht und Balade genommen.
=====================
Christians Memmories of Graal
poem of Graal Kingdoms
"The Land with Good and Evil"
=====================
<- Der Anfang: ->

Als ich eines Tages erwachte und die Sonne sah,
da lag ich schon da,
tief im Sand liegend,
die Wellen in meinem nacken spürend,
lag ich so da,

und fragte mich "wo komm ich her?",
"ist denn kein einziger Mensch hier?",

Als dann ein alter Man so stand,
und ich ihn um Hilfe bat,
da half er mir geschwind.

So begann meine Reise,
durch das Land aber ich war weise,
So wusste ich geschwind ohne Wissen das nichts wird.

Nette Leute halfen mir,
das freute mich sehr.

Ein Seeman mich fragte,
ich glaube er sagte,
"mächtest du aufs große Land?",
die Entscheidung schnell gefund',
ich mich an die reling bund,
ein sturm mich zwingte in die tiefe,
nach der Reise der Seeman riefe,

"komm her wir sind da".

So stand ich alleine,
verlassen,
verloren,
in einem fremden Land.
doch das mich nicht bezwingen kann',
so ging ich meines weges fort,
und sah die erste stadt dort!,
Ihr' name konnte ich recht lesen,
"Bomboria"..

des seemans letzter gruß,
das ich stärker werden kann,
ermutigt mich sogleich,
zu erkunden was ich da sah..

Die Reise wart nicht ohne folgen,
ein Brunnen ich sah,
sogleich das Wasser lief,
und sich in meinen Rachen gieß.

Gestillt wart nun mein Durst,
aber der Hunger kam langsam nahe dem tod,
Am Strand ich meinen ersten bomy sah,
er aber gleich dem tode nah,
sein Fleisch ich mir genahm,
und richer schmecken laß.

Ich einen blick auf die Karte riskierte,
und mein ziel schon erspähte,
"Harmonia" dessen nahme schon frohlockte,
auf dem wegen zu dieser,
die bomys qurden immer mährer.

In Harmonia ich kam,
einen Pfeil und bogen mir nahm,
sogleich ich aufbroch zu neuen taten,
da musste keine raten,
den dungeon gleich gewusst,
die wöfle sterben musst',

Im dungeon ich betrat,
eine dunkle höhle es ward,
sogleich ich einen gegner sah't,
den bogen gleich gezogen,
der pfeil schon am flogen,
in die brust des gegners er traf,
und eine wunde laas,
die ihn zu tode brachte.

Ein großer t-rex aufeinmal kam,
die zähne schon ganz nah,
ich die macht in mir fühlen,
ich den zauber sprechend,
er von meiner feuerwand,
schnell fliegend zu tode kam.

Die erfahrung dieses kampfes nutzend,
ich etwas stärker werdend,
zu einem neuen abenteuer aufbrach,
und schon auf dem halben wege ward,
zurück ich kam zu holen,
das heart und liver des rexes,
mitnehmen ich ging,
zum shop weit weg,

Tanarthia mein ziel sogleich war,
um geld zu bekommen,
das war klar,

5 plat?,
mein herr ich bin experte,
das ein Heart und Liver mehr werte,
so ich bekam 50 platin.

Vom Hunted House ich schon gehört,
gleich die bedeutung schon gerührt,
starke monster mich erwarte,
aber ich sogleich auch wusste,
das bomys nicht zu täuschen sind,

ein großer krieger kann schwach sein,
ein kleiner krieger kann stark sein,
ein bomy wisse was ich bin,
und ich ergründen müsse,
was ich sei.

mein verstand mir riet,
den gott zu fragen was er von mir hielt,
den Altar hoch im norden ich besucht',
und beetend mir der sinne kam,
das ich klein und schwach aussehend sei,
aber meine kraft von innen kam,
die magie und gott mir wohl bekannt,
ich ihre macht zu nutzen wisse.

/*
<-- poem Teil 1. der Anfang -->
- nun der Krieg der Völker -
- fortsetzung des 1. Teils -
-"Gelernt ich werde Was gut dann ist"-
<- Fortsetzung ->
*/

Ich hörte von andren Länd',
die abseitz dieser insel sind,
Ein alter Man mir sagend,
das diese einen Krieg bald wagend,
Ich mich entscheiden musst.

Ein Boot mir bauend,
ich alsdann verlies,
die insel,
die ich mein zuhause wies,
die Seegel weit auf,
der Wind schon frisch,
das Boot in Richtung Westen wich.

Nach einer langen Nacht,
Ich ersah,
die Lande Dustarias,

Nach dem önig ich ersand,
und nun ein Dustari ich ward,
Hörend das morgen ein großer krieg stattfindend',
Ich mir nahrung hold'.

Der Prinz,
der Larrien genannt,
uns die order gebend,
eine Flotte zu bauen,
Führte uns an.

Die Brise spürend,
als Captain der Flotte segelnd,
Dustari wir verliesen,
aufs ungewisse wir gerieten,
voller mut und stolz wir uns noch fühlten,
alsgleich wir wissend,
was wir taten,
wir gleich bei den Piraten warend.

Die Ankunft sehr ungewiss ward,
Auf uns nicht gefasst,
nur 2 Piraten den strand bewacht,
gefangene sie nun warend.

Der GeisterPirat nun kam,
eine Flotte mit 50 Man,

Das Kampfes Horn sich erhob,
das Feld rasch überflog,
die Armeen warn gefasst,
nun sei es denn,
der krieg war in gange..

Nach einer Stund,
kaum ein dustarien sich noch erhob',
Gefangen wir warn',
als dann Rebellen zu hilfe kam',
Sie die Piraten töteten,
und uns helfend zur seite stehnd'.

Unser SchlachtSchif die Phoenix am Grunde lag,
wir ein schiff der Piraten nehmend,
uns auf den Weg begebend,
Heute wir verloren haben,
aber morgen wir gewinnen werden.

Ich verlies die Reihen Dustaris als gleich,
als einsamer wanderer das leben besser sei..

/*
<- Forsetzung in 10-20 mins ->
=====================
Christians Memmories of Graal
poem of Graal Kingdoms
"Ich bald Freunde fand"
=====================
<- ->
*/

Butz
02-06-2003, 09:30 PM
(Haiku-y...yay.)
Now I point my wand,
Oh dear, I have just been stabbed.
My spell, it is lost.

Zurkiba
02-06-2003, 09:34 PM
I dont think it's wise to do it in Dutch since people are supposed to comment on it

Christian
02-06-2003, 09:36 PM
hmm..
k

I use Bubble Fish to translate it fast so you know what is in the poem..
<- edit->
When I saw a daily awaked and the sun,
there I lay,
already there deeply lying in the sand,
in my neck feeling the waves,
lay I so there, and asked myself "where come I?",
"are not one humans here?",
When then older one stood in such a way,
and I asked him around assistance,
helped there he me geschwind.
Thus my journey,
by which country was however I points,
began then knew I geschwind without knowledge the nothing becomes.
Nice people helped me,
made happy me much.
Seeman asked me,
I believed he said,
would you go on the large country?",
the decision fast gefund ',
I to the railing federation,
a storm me zwingte itself into the deep,
after the journey Seeman would call,
"there come ago we are".
Thus I was located alone,
abandoned, lost,
in a strange country me nevertheless not to defeat can ',
then I went my way away, and saw the first city there!,
It ' name could I quite read,
"Bomboria".. seemans last greeting,
which can become stronger I,
encourages me immediately to explore which I saw there.
The journey do not wait without follow,
a well I saw, immediately the water ran,
and in my throats pour yourself.
Satisfied wait now my thirst, but hunger came close to death,
at the beach I mean first slow bomy saw,
he however equal death near,
his meat I, and to taste more richer leave.
I a view of the map risked,
and my goal already erspaehte,
"Harmonia" its nahme glad-lured,
on because of to this, already,
bomys qurden ever more maehrer.
Into Harmonia I came,
an arrow and bent to me took,
immediately I aufbroch to new did,
there had none to guess, the Dungeon equivalent known,
which must die woefle ',
In the Dungeon I entered,
a dark excavate it ward,
immediately I an opponent sah't,
whom bent equivalent pulled, the arrow already to flew,
into the chest of the opponent it met,
and a wound laas, which brought him to death.
More largely t-rex up once,
the teeth already completely near,
I came make in me feel,
I speaking the charm,
he of my fireproof wall,
fast flying death came.
The experience of this fight using,
I somewhat more strongly becoming,
to a new adventure applied,
and already on the half way ward, back I came to get,
heart and more liver the rexes,
carry forward I left, to shop far,
Tanarthia my goal immediately was,
in order to get money, that was clear,
5 plat?, my Mr. I is expert, whom a Heart and a Liver rate more, thus I got 50 platinum.
From the Hunted House I already belonged,
equal the meaning already agitated,
strong monsters me expect,
but I immediately also knew,
which are not to be deceived bomys,
a large krieger can be weak,
a small krieger can be strong,
bomy knows which I is, and I must fathom, which I am.
mine understood me guessed/advised to ask the God which it about me held,
which to altar highly in the north I visited ',
and patch-end me reflect came,
which is small and weakly looking I,
but my strength came from the inside,
those magic and God me makes probably well-known, I their to use knew.

< - - poem part 1. the beginning -->
- now the war of the peoples -
- continuation of the 1. Partly -
"Gelernt I become which well then is "-
< - continuation - >
*/


I heard of other Lands',
which abseitz this island are,
old one me saying,
which these a war soon daring,
I decide must.
Me building a boat,
I then read out, the island,
which I pointed mine at home, the sea-gel far up,
the wind already freshly,
the boat toward the west yielded.
After a long night,
I saw, country the Dustarias,
After that oenig I ersand,
and now a Dustari I ward,
hearing that tomorrow a large war taking place ',
I me food hold '.
The prince, the Larrien mentioned,
the order giving us to build a fleet stated us.
Feeling the Brise,
when Captain of the fleet verliesen segelnd,
Dustari we, on the uncertain we,
full courage and we came still felt proud,
we knowing, what we did,
we directly with the Piraten be-end.
The arrival very uncertainly ward,
on us calm, to only 2 Piraten the beach guarded,
caught it now do not be-end. The GeisterPirat now,
a fleet with 50 one came,
Fight the horn rose,
the field rapidly flew over,
the armies warns calm,
now it was,
the war was in course.
After one grant, hardly a dustarien still rose ',
imprisoned we warn ',
as then a rebel to assistance came ',
you the Piraten killed, and helping us to the side stehnd '.
Our SchlachtSchif the Phoenix at the reason was,
we taking a ship of the Piraten,
on the way going us, today we lost,
but we will win tomorrow.
I read out the rows Dustaris as alike,
when lonely wanderer live is better.
< - Forsetzung in 10-20 mins - >
=====================
Christians Memmories OF Graal
poem OF Graal Kingdoms "I soon friends found"
=====================
< - - >
* /

aylad
02-06-2003, 10:28 PM
From the shop's corner I watch them.
Like a multicolored tide, the Elves and Men
ebb and flow, ebb and flow.
The shopclerk battles to make a profit;
against the charm of the charmers
he is powerless.

I watch them interact: their lust and hate
become weapons in the war,
the war they fight of pride and honor...
the war of identity... "I am the greatest!"
cries one. The others shout denials.
Pathetic.

I watch them scream at each other,
all so obsessed with themselves,
all so certain that they are the strongest
and all so afraid that they might be wrong.
A fight breaks out. One is dead, the other proud,
but which is which?

I pass unseen through them, silent,
assuming no false dignity, no pretensions,
demanding no homage. They care not.
She cares not. And I wonder:
is this the secret? Is this how to win her?
Through insanity?

Perhaps I should join with them.
To live within the village, within walls
and beneath a roof, to join with her.
To join with her. Is it worth it? Could I live
bound by the laws of Men?
I cannot.

I pass unseen just before her eyes.
She cares not, and I am left adrift.
Back to the forest, to ash and pine,
casting spells over my cauldron and wishing,
wishing, that within the walls of the wild
she could live.

Kinatt
02-06-2003, 11:48 PM
omg they are too long omg omg I like mine ^_^ short and a poetic song x_x

Zurkiba
02-07-2003, 01:24 AM
Originally posted by Kinatt
omg they are too long omg omg I like mine ^_^ short and a poetic song x_x
Exactly, If we flood the event with extremely long poems then Loriel wont read them and he'll choose at random :D

Nah I'm playing o.o

JrTerrorist
02-07-2003, 04:12 AM
SHouldve restricted it to leik 10 lines ;_;

Falcor
02-07-2003, 04:59 AM
The Truth

I
See
Dumb People
They are everywhere
They walk around like anyone else
And they don't even know they are dumb.

Dude6252000
02-07-2003, 05:10 AM
Yay. Even though this isn't IC o_O

I'm trying to kill a shell bomy.
I made the sad mistake of switching to battle mode at level 1.
A person punches me once.
I drop my Dude6252000's ancient bamboo of ogma +3 because of item drop.
Oh dear.

That was perfect, *is going to win*.

Zurkiba
02-07-2003, 04:17 PM
Originally posted by Falcor
The Truth

I
See
Dumb People
They are everywhere
They walk around like anyone else
And they don't even know they are dumb.
Not yours, Nor is it even in IC :D

Originally posted by Dude6252000
Yay. Even though this isn't IC o_O

I'm trying to kill a shell bomy.
I made the sad mistake of switching to battle mode at level 1.
A person punches me once.
I drop my Dude6252000's ancient bamboo of ogma +3 because of item drop.
Oh dear.

That was perfect, *is going to win*.
Not in IC o.o

Kinatt
02-07-2003, 05:38 PM
I like mine you can sing it like a hip hop song!

LOA--Paul
02-11-2003, 07:10 AM
Originally posted by Butz
(Haiku-y...yay.)
Now I point my wand,
Oh dear, I have just been stabbed.
My spell, it is lost.

Gaha, perfection.

Tseng
02-11-2003, 07:21 AM
Originally posted by Zurkiba
I dont think it's wise to do it in Dutch since people are supposed to comment on it

Not "Dutch."

Dutch=Language spoken in the Netherlands.

Deutsch=German for German.

Now you know the difference. :)

Zurkiba
02-11-2003, 04:41 PM
Originally posted by Tseng


Not "Dutch."

Dutch=Language spoken in the Netherlands.

Deutsch=German for German.

Now you know the difference. :)
Dutch = German o.o

neomaximus2k2
02-11-2003, 07:26 PM
Originally posted by Zurkiba

Dutch = German o.o

Dutch language is the language of the netherlands / holland

It depends on the spelling tho.

Kinatt
02-11-2003, 09:28 PM
who won?

Loriel
02-12-2003, 03:39 PM
I expected a little more effort, like, more serious participants and votes. :\

Schaekel
02-12-2003, 03:56 PM
Are German Poem's allowed in this contest too? :rolleyes:

--Chris--
02-12-2003, 09:00 PM
My poem is serious...kinda...
It's meant to emphasise the st00p1d1ty some players carry on with.

I also got a vote from Karsh ;-;

Locke_boy
02-13-2003, 01:07 AM
Originally posted by Butz
(Haiku-y...yay.)
Now I point my wand,
Oh dear, I have just been stabbed.
My spell, it is lost.

:: laughs, amused ::

That's great, that's a great poem, I hope you win, hahah..

Locke_boy
02-13-2003, 01:09 AM
Err .. is the contest still going on?

Kinatt
02-13-2003, 06:44 PM
No loriel is being mean to the poetry writers that spent hours writing it just so they could see the smile on loriel's face.. *sigh* however we have just been shunned upon because he feels we are not worthy of his opinion.. *cries and runs outside like a little girl*

Zurkiba
02-13-2003, 06:56 PM
Originally posted by Loriel
I expected a little more effort, like, more serious participants and votes. :\
Hibbity Dibbity Do
Loriel is Cool
His dog is too
Hibbity Dibbity Do

:)

Kinatt
02-13-2003, 07:24 PM
roflmao I vote for zurks

Locke_boy
02-13-2003, 07:34 PM
Originally posted by aylad
From the shop's corner I watch them...

...the walls of the wild she could live.

That was great. I like it a lot. :)

Locke_boy
02-13-2003, 07:36 PM
Originally posted by JrTerrorist
HERE!

ShipWrecked
Sailing along on a midsummers day...

...before I die, I really miss Chicken Pie

:whatever:

Clever last line, hah..

Locke_boy
02-13-2003, 07:45 PM
I liked Christian's poem. It was .. reminiscent. It made me remember the old, good times. Although at some points it was hard to understand (Babelfish did its best, heh), I got most of what he was saying. I'm sure it sounds better in German, but it didn't sound too shabby to me. I liked it. :)

Kinatt
02-15-2003, 11:28 PM
Ode to my dingaling.

My dingaling oh my dingaling
my dingaling is the cutest thing
my dingaling oh my dingaling
I want you to play with my dingaling!

When I was young there was a girl next door..
I wanted to play with her yoyo..
I played with her yoyo on a string
and she played with my dingaling!

My dingaling oh my dingaling
my dingaling is the cutest thing
my dingaling oh my dingaling
I want you to play with my dingaling!

When I was young I went to sunday school
the preacher preached me the golden rule..
but when the quier stood up to sing..
I was playing with my dingaling!!

My dingaling oh my dingaling
my dingaling is the cutest thing
my dingaling oh my dingaling
I want you to play with my dingaling!
Now when your young and out touring..
Your dingaling wont ever get boring!
Now when your old and you lost your sting..
You got no need for that damn thing!

My dingaling oh my dingaling
my dingaling is the cutest thing
my dingaling oh my dingaling
I want you to play with my dingaling!

Locke_boy
02-16-2003, 01:01 AM
Getting in touch with my Irish roots .. sounds best if you recite it as limericks ought be said. I figure I'll write a few. :)

A spell that I like is "create bomb".
I cast it and splints fly out from.
The splint hits my friend,
He cries out "It's the end!"
In response I reply "all in good fun."

Ugly creatures I've found are called heavils.
They all are so cold and so evil.
When one does draw close,
I go throw on my coat,
but it's quite different when seeing a dievil.

While roaming about Graal Island,
I often do find things exciting.
Things like rabbits and such,
although it's really not much,
so I'm wrong, Graal's not all too enticing.

I just can't get anything else to roll off the tongue, so that's it for now. Maybe I'll add others later. :o

TerrorBite
02-27-2003, 04:55 AM
umm it is supposed to be in character locke ;)

Locke_boy
02-27-2003, 06:19 AM
Originally posted by TerrorBite
umm it is supposed to be in character locke ;)

It was. :P

TerrorBite
02-27-2003, 08:55 PM
hmm ok, that last line threw me off a bit ^.^;;.. just checking up on ya, ... I'm bored :p

Locke_boy
02-27-2003, 10:09 PM
Originally posted by TerrorBite
hmm ok, that last line threw me off a bit ^.^;;.. just checking up on ya, ... I'm bored :p

Graal Island :p

Yeah, I can tell you're bored, hah ..

zs0
03-28-2003, 04:41 AM
Originally posted by Kinatt
Ode to my dingaling.

My dingaling oh my dingaling
my dingaling is the cutest thing
my dingaling oh my dingaling
I want you to play with my dingaling!

When I was young there was a girl next door..
I wanted to play with her yoyo..
I played with her yoyo on a string
and she played with my dingaling!

My dingaling oh my dingaling
my dingaling is the cutest thing
my dingaling oh my dingaling
I want you to play with my dingaling!

When I was young I went to sunday school
the preacher preached me the golden rule..
but when the quier stood up to sing..
I was playing with my dingaling!!

My dingaling oh my dingaling
my dingaling is the cutest thing
my dingaling oh my dingaling
I want you to play with my dingaling!
Now when your young and out touring..
Your dingaling wont ever get boring!
Now when your old and you lost your sting..
You got no need for that damn thing!

My dingaling oh my dingaling
my dingaling is the cutest thing
my dingaling oh my dingaling
I want you to play with my dingaling!


beautiful.. XP